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Is mental strength important for success in sport or is it more important to be strong and fit for success in sport? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

there is no denying the fact that the main purpose of
success
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 in
sports
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 is arguable.
while
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 it is a commonly held belief that mental
strength
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 and being mentally well
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 significant roles in
sports
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success
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, there is
also
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 an argument that
body
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strength
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 is more important for
success
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 in
sports
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 irrespective of
mental
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the mental
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 health of
sports
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players
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. on
one
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 hand,playing a
sport
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 may need mental
strength
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 only to achieve
pleyers
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players
 ambition to be successful in their competition because they think when the player becomes mentally well his
body
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 will become more energetic and he can bear the burden of
sport
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.
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, the brain can induce our
body
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 to work harder which can help in
sports
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success
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.
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, learning how to deal with our brain can help to control our
body
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 and has a positive impact on
body
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 health as well.
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, psychological factors like sadness and happiness have a vital role in
players
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' performance in their games and they should how to isolate themselves from anything that affects their psychology.
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,
body
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 fitness and physical ability can have
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 impact on
sports
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success
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.It is possible to say that playing a
sport
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 , especially a
sport
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 that depends on
body
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 movement and
strength
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 will depend on if the
players
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 strong
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enough
 or if they need more practice to achieve their victories.
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, without intensive training, nothing will assist
sports
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players
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 to become successful in their field.
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, swimmers spend a lot of time in training before their competition. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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 question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that nothing is more important than another, both
of
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views are important to get a desired outcome.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and support this with relevant examples.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer links between ideas in your paragraphs to improve the flow of your argument.
task achievement
Provide a stronger conclusion that summarizes your main points and reinforces your opinion more clearly.
task achievement
You have demonstrated some understanding of both views on mental strength and physical ability in sports.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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