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the chart below shows the % of household in owned and rented accommodation in england and wales between 1918 and 2011

the chart below shows the % of household in owned and rented accommodation in england and wales between 1918 and 2011
The bar graph illustrates the ratio of households
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 owned and rented accommodation in two different
country
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countries
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Britan
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Britain
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 and Wales from year 1918 to 2011. The data
measured
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is measured
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 in
percentage
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percentages
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.
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, the rental places were more popular among residents than purchasing a house to live in from
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the year
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year
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years
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 1918 to 1961.
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, people started investing in property over the years in
given
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 time.
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While in
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 1971 citizens showed
same
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the same
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interested
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 in both kinds by
exact
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 50 percent.
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, the proportion of property buyers and
lease holders
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leaseholders
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 was
same
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the same
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 in two different years 1939 and 1953;
which
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were slightly more than 32 and
at
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around 78 respectively. Noticeably, rented
place
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places
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 which
was
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had
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 having downward trend went up significantly in 2011 by 3
percent
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per cent
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 from the previous time.
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, the highest count for a rental home is observed more than 85
percent
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per cent
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 in 1918 and
lowest
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the lowest
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 in 2001 which was
bellow
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below
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 33%.

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