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The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020.

The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020.
The bar chart presents the proportion distribution of different
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 groups in Iceland from 1990 to 2020.
Overall
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, the 25 to 54
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 made up the majority of
population
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the population
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,
while
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 the 0 to 14 and 15 to 24
age
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 groups declined gradually over the given period.
In contrast
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, the percentage of people aged 55 to 64
as well as
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 65 and over experienced only minor changes. In terms of the 25-54
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group
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, the figure increased steadily from just above 30% in 1990 to nearly 40% in 2010 before rising more sharply to just under 50% in 2020, making it the largest contributor to
Iceland
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Iceland's
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 population.
By comparison
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, the share of individuals aged 0 to 14 dropped slightly from 25% to just below 20%. A similar trend was seen in the 15-24
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group
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, where the figure dropped significantly from around 21% to 8%, presenting the lowest share in 2020.
On the other hand
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, there was a small gap between the 55-64 and 65+
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 groups, accounting for more than 10%. In 2000, the former
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 recorded a minor decrease
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 around 1%,
while
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 the latter
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 remained unchanged.
However
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, in the next decade, the 65+
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group
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 rose slightly to 15% and stabilised
thereafter
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,
whereas
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 the 55-64
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group
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 dropped to exactly 10% in 2020.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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