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The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002. Summarize where relevant

The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002. Summarize where relevant
The chart picture compares the amounts of tragedies by transportation type in 2002, divided into two categories
such
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 as incidents and
injuries
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. The category of the vehicle includes the commuter
rail
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, the heavy
rail
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, the light
rail
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, the bus, and the demand response.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the number of incidents was higher than the number of
injuries
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.
Moreover
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, the safest accommodation was the commuter
rail
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 and the most dangerous one was the demand response.
According to
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 the graph, the most guaranteed vehicle was the commuter
rail
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, which accounted for the designs and damages at under 30
million
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PMT
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. The second safest mode of the vehicle was the heavy
rail
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, with an average of around 50
million
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PMT
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, which was valued at 50 designs and 40 damages respectively.
In contrast
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, it is very clear that the unsafe accommodation came from the demand response. The amount of the incident and the
injuries
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 at around 250 and 170
million
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PMT
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, making it the highest value
above all
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.
On the other hand
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, we can
also
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 conclude that the bus had as many as the light
rail
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 for the incidents, with 70
million
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PMT
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,
whereas
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 the value of
injuries
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 was slightly different, with 70 and 40
million
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PMT
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words injuries, rail, million, pmt with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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