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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

People in your area are having problems with their internet connection. Write a letter to the company which provides the connection. In your letter, describe the problems explain how it is affecting people say what the company should do to help

Dear Sir or Madam, you are my
internet
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 provider, I
was
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 using your
internet
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 services
from
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for
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long
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a long
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 time. I am
wriiting
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writing
this
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 letter regarding
problems
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the problems
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me
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I
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 and my
neghibhourhood
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neighbourhood
people
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 are dealing
.
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with.
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 The main problem is
internet
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 connectivity most of the time
internet
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 modem shows
their
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 is no connection
of
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to
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internet
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the internet
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. It automatically
get
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gets
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 disconnected from the devices. Most
of
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apply
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the
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people
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 are complaining
the
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about the
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 same issue. I
completey
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completely
 understand
with
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that
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 losing
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internet
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the internet
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,
it
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apply
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affect the working
sechdule
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schedule
 of
people
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 as most
of
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the
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people
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 these days
do
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work from home.
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,
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 students and
senoir
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senior
 citizens are
also
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 dependent on the
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internet
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such
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 as learning classes and entertainment. The
resoultion
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resolution
 to
mitgate
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mitigate
this
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 issue, I can see wiring needs to
be change
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be changed
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 in our area streets as the ongoing
consutrction
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construction
 of new houses creating all the problems. Thank you for
you
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your
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 consideration, I hope the issues will be
resloved
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resolved
 soon. Yours faithfully, Shivani.

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Language
Make sure to check the spelling of words such as 'writing' and 'neighborhood'. Use correct grammar and punctuation in your sentences.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to give a more clear structure. Each paragraph should focus on one idea: describing the problem, explaining the impact, and suggesting a solution.
Task Achievement
You have addressed the letter to the correct audience and showed your understanding of the problem.
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