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The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts provide key information about the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the first graph in 2000 that Yemen
people
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 aged 0-14
years
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 represented 50.1%. Middle-aged
people
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 in the
years
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 from 15-59 reached 46.3%,
whereas
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people
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 over 60 illustrated 3.6%.
According to
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 what is shown in 2025 for Yemen individuals, the number of
people
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 aged 0-14 will decrease and reach 37%,
whereas
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 the adults 15-95 will increase by nearly 9% arriving at 57.3%. There is a slight increase for
people
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 who are over 60 about 5,7% In terms of Italy
people
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 in 2000, children represented the lowest proportion approximately 14.3%.
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 the adults 15-59 arrived at the highest ratio.
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,
people
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 who aged over 60 represented a quarter ratio. In the future, Italy's kids will decrease and reach 11.5%.
people
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 from the child stage until 59
years
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also
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 will decrease by 15% and will touch 46.2%.
People
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 over 60
years
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 will be raised to 42.3%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age distribution
  • population demographics
  • projected
  • projections
  • notable changes
  • demographic changes
  • implications
  • birth rates
  • life expectancy
  • senior citizens
  • young population
  • working-age population
  • dependency ratio
  • aging population
  • socio-economic impact
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