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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
The graph demonstrates the
amount
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number
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 of
tourists
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 travelling to the magnificent Caribbean
island
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 between 2010 and 2017.
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,over the period from 2010 to 2017,the
number
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 of
tourists
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 arriving
Caribbean
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on Caribbean
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island
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islands
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 remained
an
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on an
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 upward trend
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, whatever
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whatever which
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whichever
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 way they chose.It’s
clearly
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 that
,
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apply
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most of the visitors chose to stay on the
island
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 to get a greater view of it. In 2010,1million
tourists
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 in total came to the
island
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 ,among them, 3 in fourth of 0.75
million
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 chose to stay on
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island
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the island
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 and a quarter left of 0.25
million
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staying
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stayed
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 on ships. During the next 5 years to 2015,the
tourists
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 who chose staying on islands doubled from the level of 0.75 to a higher one of 1.5 in 2013 and maintained the plateau for 2 more years.Meanwhile,another choice witnessed fluctuation and started the constant growth in 2012,from 0.25 to 1.25,in 2015. Between 2015 to 2016,the two lines experienced a cross of 1.25
million
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,
that
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which
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 means the
number
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 of visitors staying on cruise ships surpassed another one.What’s more,the total figure reached a platform of 2.75.In the
last
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 year in the graph,the
number
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 of
the
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apply
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both ways grew remarkably,so as the total
number
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,dramatically to
the 3.5millions
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3.5 million
.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, island, number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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