The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
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illustrated
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the data for tourists visiting Caribbean
island
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islands
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from the year 2010 to 2017.
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, the number of total
visitors
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witnessed a dramatic growth during
this
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period
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particularly a
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a particularly
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strong increase in the
figure
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number
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of
visitors
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staying on cruise ships. The number of total
visitors
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rose from 1
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millions
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million
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in 2010 to 3.5
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millions
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million
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in 2017.
Visitors
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staying on
island
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the island
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accounted for the majority
started
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apply
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from 2010 to 2015
,
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The data for it remained 0.55
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millions
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million
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during 2010-2011 , before experiencing a big growth from 0.55
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millions
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million
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in 2011 to 1.5
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millions
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million
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in 2015.
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,it decreased to 1.25
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millions
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million
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in
2016
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2016,
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followed by a bounce back to
1.5millions
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1.5 million
in 2017 The number of
visitors
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staying on cruise ships grew from 0.25
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millions
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million
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in 2010 to 0.5
in
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million in
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2011.
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Conversely
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it witnessed a decline in 2012 before showing a stable
increase
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trend until 2017.,
with 0.25millions
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from 0.25 million
in 2012 to 2
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millions
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million
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in 2017.Notably ,the figure of
visitors
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staying on cruise surpassed that for
visitors
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staying on
island
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the island
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during 2015-2016.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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