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This table shows the class numbers by level at mother tongue language school. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

This table shows the class numbers by level at mother tongue language school. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The table provides information about the number of students who use the local
language
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school
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.
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,
the
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most
people
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 who use
local
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language
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 are
the
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 intermediate
level
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  and the lowest categories are the proficiency and the advanced levels.
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 with, the intermediate
level
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 has the most
users
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 who are using the local
language
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 at
school
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. Followed by,
pre-intermediate
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level
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 is in second place with 100
users
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.
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 in third place with 90 students is the elementary
level
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. The upper intermediate
level
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 reaches 50
people
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 who use
this
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language
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 at
school
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.
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, some classifications of students with fewer than 50
people
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 are the beginner with 30
users
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, and both the advanced and the proficiency have 25
people
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 in the survey. To summarize, the number of
people
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the
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 mother tongue
language
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 at
school
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 and are above 100 are the pre-intermediate and the intermediate levels. The elementary category just reached 90
users
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, making
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 figure in the middle class.
Finally
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, the classifications that have fewer
users
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, which are under 90
people
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, are the upper intermediate, the beginner, the proficiency and the advanced,  at 50, 30, 25,
25
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, respectively.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words language, school, people, level, users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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