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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in European countries between 1987 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in European countries between 1987 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
The line graph compares how many overseas
visitors
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 were recorded in three different areas of a European country between 1987 and 2007.
Overall
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, the three areas experienced different trends in the time period.
While
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 the
number
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 of
visitors
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 to the coast rose gradually, the lake areas experienced a considerable increase followed by a decline.
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 to the mountain
was
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increased
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slightly with
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slightly with
 minor fluctuation As the graph illustrates, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 to the coast started at 40
thousand
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 in 1987 which was followed by a small decrease to around just over 20
thousand
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 in 1992.
Subsequently
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, it increased gradually with minor fluctuation until it increased to 70
thousand
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 in 2007. Regarding
to
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another type of
visitors
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, the
number
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 of tourists to the lake was recorded at 10
thousand
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 in 1987. The figure rose gradually to reach a maximum with some variation of about 70
thousand
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 in 2002,
however
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,
as a result
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, numbers experienced a considerable decline to just over 50
thousand
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 in 2007.
In contrast
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 to the mountains experienced a slight increase in the 20-year period. In 1987, approximately 20,000
visitors
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 were recorded, but
this
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number
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 increased with minor fluctuations until it reached 30,000
visitors
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 in 2007

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, number, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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