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The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Describe the information shown below in your own words. What implications do the indicators have for the countries?

The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Describe the information shown below in your own words. What implications do the indicators have for the countries?
The table illustrates the
stastics
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statistics
 provided by the United Nations on social and economic indicators for Canada,
Japan
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,
Peru
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 and
Zaire
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 in 1994.
Overall
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, it is evident that
Japan
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 indicated the highest figures in all the standards in comparison
of
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 other nations
whereas
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 the results derived from
Zaire
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 demonstrated
least
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the lowest
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values. In terms of annual income per person, Japanese and Canadians earned a significant amount of money which was 15760 US
dolllars
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dollars
 and 11100 dollars, respectively.
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, the earnings of a
Peru
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 citizen
was
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 160 dollars and for a
Zaire
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 resident was 130 dollars.
On the other hand
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, the life expectancy at birth was highest for the Japanese and Canadian
population
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populations
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, accounting for around 77
while
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 the rate in
other
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the other
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 two nations was approximately 50. In the context of the daily calorie supply per person, an individual from Canada consumed 3326 calories and a person from
Japan
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 had 2846 calorie intake.
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, as per other values, people of
Peru
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 and
Zaire
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 had comparatively less amount of
calories
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calorie
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 supply of below 2000.
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, the demonstration of adult literacy rates depicts that the proportion of adults who pursued education was 99 per cent in Canada and
Japan
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 but qualified people in
Peru
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 was 68 per cent and the proportion of educated citizens in
Zaire
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 was 38 per cent.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, peru, zaire with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • indicators
  • population
  • GDP per capita
  • life expectancy
  • literacy rate
  • infant mortality rate
  • prosperous
  • less developed
  • level of education
  • healthcare
  • improvements
  • services
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