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The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided chart illustrates the vehicles in different countries from 1990 and 1999 by using thefts per thousand
unit
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.
Overall
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, it is evident that
the
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Great Britain was the highest country,
while
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 Canada was the lowest.
Moreover
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, Sweden showed an upward trend throughout the years.
According to
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 what the graph shows
is that
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,
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 Sweden was around 5%,
while
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UK
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the UK
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 was greater by almost three times in 1990. After 4 years, Britain declined
then
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 significantly increased, but Sweden sharply rose during
this
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 period. In 1999, Great still
flactuated
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fluctuated
 from the beginning until the
last
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 year provided in the line chart.
In contrast
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, the other country claimed the whole period.
It is clear that
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 France and Canada were approximately
in
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the same average. Starting around 7% and slightly decreased from 1990 to 1993. Between 1994 and 1997, both of them
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 to mostly 10%, but France was higher than Canada in
very
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 small amount of usage. During the
last
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 stage, these countries reached
to
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the same amount which is around 6%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theft rate
  • fluctuations
  • trend
  • vehicle theft
  • per thousand vehicles
  • decade
  • steady increase
  • steep decline
  • comparative analysis
  • noteworthy changes
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