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Nowadays, many people choose to work remotely from home instead of commuting to the office every day. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working from home?

These days, employees consider working from home far better, rather than going to the office. I will be discussing a few advantages and disadvantages in
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 essay. One of the main advantages of working remotely is that it saves a lot of
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 in commuting. And people living in different parts of the country don't have to move their location. Another benefit of working from home is increased productivity. I firmly believe that working from home helps us manage our
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 more efficiently which leads to better quality of work and increased productivity.
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, remote jobs help us maintain our health as well.
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, there are a few drawbacks of doing our job from a comfortable environment
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 as less communication with colleagues and clients, no social interactive experiences and many more. One major disadvantage is that freshers who just started working will have no office knowledge and experience like everyone else. And from my perspective, social interaction is extremely important and beneficial in every field of work. All things considered, workers still prefer working from their own place as it saves us a lot of
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 and energy and
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 saves us some
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 to work on our own hobbies or personal things to do.

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You clearly stated the topic and provided a balanced view of pros and cons.
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Your ideas are relevant and show good understanding of the subject.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommuting
  • flexible working hours
  • work-life balance
  • commute
  • productivity
  • job satisfaction
  • talent pool
  • geographical diversity
  • cost savings
  • isolation
  • team cohesion
  • collaboration
  • overwork
  • burnout
  • financial benefits
  • environmental benefits
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