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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line chart provides key information about the amount of money spent on books in four different countries between 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, France and Australia’s spending on books increased significantly over the entire time
period
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.
While
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 Italy’s spending fluctuated, Germany experienced a dramatic upward trend. Germany was the biggest consumer of books from 1995 to 1999 at around 90
million
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, but its spending steadily dropped to just over 71
million
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 in 2003 before rising again to about 93
million
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 in 2005. Despite the earlier decline, Germany’s figures remained the highest throughout the
period
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. France’s spending began the recorded
period
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 at around 57
million
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 and consistently increased year on year to just below 80
million
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 in 2005. Australia was the lowest
overall
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 consumer at the start of the
period
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 at around 30
million
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, but its spending increased gradually to nearly 40
million
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 over the next six years, before rising sharply to become the third highest spender with just over 60
million
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 in 2005. Italy’s spending value hovered between approximately 50
million
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 and 60
million
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 throughout the given years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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