You normally go shopping in the area where you live. However, you think some of the facilites for shoppers could be improved. Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter:say in general what you like about shopping in your area , say what is wrong with the facilities, suggest how they can be improved

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing a letter to express my feedback with regard to the shopping mall located in the heart of the city which I visit frequently.
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, the shopping market not only offers remarkable opportunities that permit me to access a wide range of supplies with ease but
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keeps me connected to the latest trends. What captivated me was the tranquillity atmosphere which got away me from the relentless demands of life. Unfortunately, the main drawback of it is the lake of suitable parking places, particularly during rush times, leading to traffic congestion.
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, on the sides of it does not exist any appropriate place for parking.
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, I must wait for several minutes in order to enter the allocated parking, which actually annoys me. I would like to suggest constructing some places to promote accessibility. behind the mall is a vacant area
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unique for making a new parking from which availability will be enhanced and traffic reduced. I appreciate your attention to
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matter, and I am looking forward to your response. Yours faithfully, Mohammadreza Hadavi

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positive
You provided a clear introduction and conclusion to your letter.
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Your suggestions for improvement are practical and relevant.
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