Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a [huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

Social networking sites

such

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as Facebook ,Instagram and Twitter

are means

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are meant

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trough

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through

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which people connect with each other showing their

lifes

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lives

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,interests and moments.

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nowdays

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nowadays

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these sites are used to

critizes

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criticise

and control the

life

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lives

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of others,by sending comments full of hate and judgements.So the real reason for the creation of social media has been replaced with bullism and cyberbullism . The rise of users of these apps in the

last

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years is

enourmous

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enormous

and it brought negative consequences on the community and population.

Firstly

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,the dependence on mobile

phone

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phones

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has

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increased in a significant way ,leading to lots of health damage.

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,many people but mostly teenagers

replaces

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their real

life

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with social media sites,becoming unable to communicate with others face to face .

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,the

costant

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constant

comparison with others may be the cause of unhappy feelings

such

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as anxiety,depression ,sadness

as well as

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insicurities

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insecurities

about physical appearance.

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Finally

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believe that using social media in an inadequate way can be harmful for people,even more

for

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so for

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teenagers ,because can lead to a wide range of deficient

behaviour

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behaviours

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like misunderstandings and mistrust .

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Jun 30, 2025

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Your introduction should clearly state your opinion on the topic.

coherence and cohesion

Try to link your ideas better. Use linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally' in a consistent way.

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Provide more specific examples or real-life situations to support your points.

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You have included valid points about the negative impact of social media.

Fully explain your ideas

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Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

181 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

social media
impact
negative
individuals
society
loneliness
anxiety
self-esteem
cyberbullying
emotional harm
mental health
information
misunderstandings
trust
connection
privacy
personal data
misuse
communication
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