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Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the worls. Why is this? What are the advantage and disadvantage of solar energy.

We live in an age when many of us rely on electricity, and the main source is engines, which are operated by fossil
fuel
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fuels
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.
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, recently, the price of oil has increased,
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, some people in several countries have turned to
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 on solar
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 by equipping their homes with solar panels. It is obvious that the change was because of the
cost
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 of electricity. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
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 shift. There are many benefits of using solar
energy
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instead
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 of using connections from electric companies.
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, cutting costs is the prime target for many of us, and solar
energy
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 is the cheapest choice in many countries.
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, operating air conditioners in a medium-sized house in Saudi Arabia costs 500SR a month, and after installing solar
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, the
cost
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 is nothing.
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, it does not need maintenance, and it lasts for 25 years.
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 is their guarantee.
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, once we install solar panels on the
roof
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roofs
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 of our houses, we can take a long rest without thinking about them.
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, solar
energy
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 relies on a renewable source, the sun, and it does not release emissions, which contributes to
decrease
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 air pollution.
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, even though it has many positives, solar
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 has drawbacks. The biggest one is the installation expenses, which
cost
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 an arm and a leg in several countries. To illustrate, in my city, one house needs 20 panels and the
cost
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 of one is 3000Sr, which is an immense number for many of us. Another setback is storing the
energy
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, which requires a huge number of batteries. In
case
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 of a house with 4 air conditioners, we should have at least 10 batteries.
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, what if we have a cloudy day? The answer to
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 question is that we need more and more storage units. In conclusion, in some places, solar
energy
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 is the ideal solution.
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, we see a significant number of households using it. I believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Once we install it, we cut the
cost
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 for a long time, and it is the best choice for the environment.

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coherence and cohesion
Improve the clarity of your points. Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
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Use more examples to support your arguments for both advantages and disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
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task achievement
Your introduction clearly sets the context and outlines the topic well.
coherence and cohesion
You present advantages and disadvantages in a well-organized manner.

Your opinion

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