The limited budgets of governments, especially those in developing countries, are better spent on health and education than on employment-generating projects. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is argued that countries with less
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should
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that
money
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on
helath
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health
care and education
system
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rather than on employing
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their
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citizens and
creaitng
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creating
new
projects
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. I disagree with
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statemnet
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statement
since employment will increase the
populations'
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income and new
projects
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will improve the country's economy. 
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the one hand improving the
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job
market
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any country will help its citizens to
havd
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have
a higher income.
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will allow
people
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to spend their
money
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on
fundmantal
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fundamental
needs like health or children's schooling.
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,
this
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will enhance the services of both sectors.
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, in
Suadi
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Saudi
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Arabia
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Arabia,
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privet hospitals and schools provide prime services to
people
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surpassing what is being provided by
government
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the government
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.
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, Generating and developing new
projects
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is a significant step to improve the national
econmey
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economy
of any country by attracting international investments and by
createing
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creating
more jobs for
people
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. These investments will bring more
money
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that
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than
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the
athourties
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authorities
can spend on different areas.
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, the government of Dubai was able to
increse
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increase
its budget by allowing for
forigen
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foreign
investments which helped the city to provide
excellant
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excellent
health care and education for its
people
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. In conclusion,
Develpeing
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Developing
countries
sholud
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should
spend
its
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their
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money
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wisely on viable options like jobs and new
projects
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which will have a positive impact on
its
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their
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econemy
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economy
then
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it
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they
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can spend
this
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money
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on
helath
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health
and education.

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Make sure you clearly state your opinion in the introduction. Also, try to use a more formal tone in your spelling and grammar.
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Use linking words and phrases to connect your ideas better. This will help your essay flow more smoothly.
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Include more examples to support your points. This will make your argument stronger and clearer.
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The essay presents a clear opinion on the topic. This is important as it shows you understand the task.
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You provided examples from Saudi Arabia and Dubai. This makes your argument stronger and adds credibility.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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