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In some countries, young people at the age of 18 are considered adults and can drive a car, vote and get married, while other countries don't allow it. What age do you think is the best to be considered an adult?

Some cultures,
beside
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besides
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 those countries
who
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that
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 do not
alllow
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allow
 it, consider those at the
age
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 of 18
are
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to be
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 grownups, they can get married, have a
license
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licensed
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 car,
Linking Words
also
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and also
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voting
Wrong verb form
vote
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. They see Themselves
same
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the same
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 as the person
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age
Wrong verb form
aged
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 21
on
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in
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the
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apply
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modern life which
the
Add a missing verb
is the
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 legal
age
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 there,
such
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 as
the
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in the
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 Kingdom Of Saudi Arabia. they
allowd
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allow
 people to get a license certificate at the
age
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21
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of 21
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. I believe The best
age
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 to
being
Wrong verb form
be
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adult
Correct article usage
an adult
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 is 22, it
biger
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is big
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 enough to handle
the
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a
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 hard life, like getting a job, and being responsible for his family.
such
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 as
,
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apply
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 a wife, mother,
son
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or son
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.
For instance
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,
a
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apply
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recent
reaserch
Correct your spelling
research
 has proven that people above the
age
Use synonyms
 of 22 are more accountable for what they do,
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also
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and also
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 handle
the
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apply
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problems well
with
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by
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 giving a solution for
it
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them
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. Most
of
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apply
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people
thinks
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think
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 that those who
Use synonyms
age
Correct your spelling
are
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 under 20 are
adolescent
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adolescents
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 they can not be liable
,
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apply
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 because they need more schooling and
learning
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learn
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 values and
manner
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manners
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 from
there
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their
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 parents. they
drivin
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drive
 for games and thrill,
comparing
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compared
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 to the real adults who think first
than
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rather than
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 act.
To sum up
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,
the
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apply
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parenting
play
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plays
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essential
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an essential
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 role
on
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in
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the
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a
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person
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person's
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behavural
Correct your spelling
behaviour
,
due to
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 the value
the
Correct your spelling
they
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 put in him,
also
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 the law roles of the government
play
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plays
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good
Add an article
a good
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 role, duo to the
regulation
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regulations
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 and the
panlities
Correct your spelling
panties
penalties
. In conclusion, human
being
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beings
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 should act in
good
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a good
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 way, for
his
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their
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 country, parents, and even
his
Correct pronoun usage
their
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 siblings.

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task achievement
Your introduction should clearly state your opinion on the best age to be considered an adult.
coherence and cohesion
Try to connect your ideas more smoothly. Use linking words like 'however', 'firstly', and 'for example'.
coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and spelling. Some words are misspelled, and sentences are hard to understand.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion that the best age to be an adult is 22, which is good for a strong argument.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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