Some people believe that government grants should be offered to people to encourage them to buy electric vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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government
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vehicles
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government
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instead
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task achievement
Try to develop your points with a bit more depth. Mention why the government should prioritize other areas over electric vehicles with more examples and detailed arguments.
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coherence cohesion
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You've adequately addressed the task by discussing both positive and negative aspects of government grants for electric vehicles.
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