The range and quality of food that we can buy has changed due to technological advances. Do the advantagesof this trend outweigh the disadvantage?

The
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variety
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availability
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transformed
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the innovation in
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which has many positive and negative effects on the market
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on consumers.
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, I believe there are more benefits
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technology
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advancement
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of the
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. First of all,
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has improved
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food
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production, making it faster and more efficient.
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leads to greater
food
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availability for people.
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:
greenhouses
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food
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aims
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in
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high production of crops and vegetables in a controlled environment.
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attains the goal of produce accessible throughout the year which controls the market price and the
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of product to a great level.
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, with
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,
farmers
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can use better methods, like drones and
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sensors
, to grow
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high
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quality
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crops. Drones can help spray fertilisers and pesticides without any risk of physical harm to the health, at the same time, sensors can detect the accurate
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temperature
inside greenhouses. These can help grow crops faster and healthier, which in turn drastically raises the
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and quantity. On the other side, there is one major drawback,
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farmers
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have to compete with the bigger corporations which can overshadow them easily.
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of
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technology
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is very high and
maintainence
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maintenance
as well, which can impact small farms and
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terribly. To illustrate, storage of
food
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requires industrial
refrigrators
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refrigerators
refrigerator
which in turn
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setup and extra space. Corporations will have the bigger market and they can use that space for various purposes
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small or
medium scale
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farmers
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will struggle in
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scenarios.
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,
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huge amount of
food
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with great
quality
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can be attained with improved
technology
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, but there are some drawbacks which can affect the
farmers
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when big industries start
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participation
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task achievement
Make your introduction clearer. State your main idea more strongly.
coherence cohesion
Try to use more linking words to connect your ideas, like 'firstly', 'however', and 'finally'.
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Add more specific examples or details in some points to strengthen your arguments.
task achievement
You provide good examples of technology in farming, like drones and greenhouses.
coherence cohesion
Your main idea is clear: you believe technology has more benefits than drawbacks.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...
Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • food production
  • availability
  • quality
  • healthy
  • online shopping
  • delivery services
  • refrigeration
  • preserve
  • waste
  • seasonal foods
  • nutrition
  • processed foods
  • small farms
  • large operations
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