The pie charts below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The tables shows how these causes affected three regions of world during the 1990s.

The pie charts below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The tables shows how these causes affected three regions of world during the 1990s.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The tables shows how these causes affected three regions of world during the 1990s.
The pie chart illustrates the causes and proportion of worldwide
degradation
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of
land
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, and
table
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the table
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depicts the percentage
in
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particular
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a particular
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region in
year
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the year
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1990.
Overall
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, in
pie
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the pie
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chart there is
land
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degradation
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cause
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caused
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by
over-garazing
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over-grazing
is more and other reasons are very
less
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little
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. The table shows Europe has
highest
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the highest
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degradation
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among other nations, and North
Amarica
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America
has
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has to
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vary
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very
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few
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little
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percenge
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percentage
of
land
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degradation
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.
According to
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pie
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the pie
a pie
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chart, men made deforestation and
over- grazing
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over-grazing
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by pets causes nearly similar and the highest proportion of
land
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degration
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degradation
, which is around 65% together.
Over cultivation
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Over-cultivation
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of plants affects 28%
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land
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of land
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with
degradation
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and
rest
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the rest
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7%
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is causes
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causes
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caused
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by other unknown factors.
Furthermore
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,
looking
Verb problem
apply
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at
table
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the table
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shows
land
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degradation
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by
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in
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different regions and the reasons for that
degradation
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,
while
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North America has
less
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a lower
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percentage with very less
0.2
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than 0.2
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% by
deforastation
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deforestation
. Europe is facing
highest
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the highest
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problems with
land
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degradation
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, the
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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issue is deforestation there
also
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,
while
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Oceania
facing
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is
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facing
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apply
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troubles with
over- grazing
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over-grazing
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with 11.3 % among 13% of total
degradation
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. There is zero problem with
over1-cultivation
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over-cultivation
in Oceania.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words degradation, land with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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