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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe they should only be allowed to study subject which are useful in future like science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
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Nowadays
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nowadays
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nowadays,
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study became
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studying has become
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important
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an important
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toubic
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topic
 in many
dvanced
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advanced
cuntry
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countries
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. this
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this
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 is why some people think that university
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student
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students
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 should
study
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a spacific
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spacific
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specific
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while
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 others believe that
universty
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university
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student
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students
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 should
study
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by
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required by
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future
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the future
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 market.
Body paragraph 1
the
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The
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 following
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discussion
 will explore the
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opposing
 views surrounding the issue and provide a reasoned personal opinion.
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on
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student
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 should join whatever they like and should follow their
intrest
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interest
of
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in
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study
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.
the
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advantge
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advantage
 of
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study
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studying
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somthing
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something
 you feel intresting about it is great and can be
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inspiring
.
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However
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however
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however,
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universty
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university
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gold
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golden
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a
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person
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person's
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 life
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to
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as
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 people
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usually start
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carer
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career
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depends
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depending
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 on what they
had
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learned
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 in university.
Body paragraph 3
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in
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 addition, we should empower the students to follow
thier
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their
 dreams by
let
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letting
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 them
choise
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choose
 their major
accourding
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according
 to their passion to
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generate
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prodactive
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productive
 generation for
future
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the future
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Body paragraph 4
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on
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 the other hand,
indvidules
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individuals
whom
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who
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 like to force the students to
study
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needful
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the necessary
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subject
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subjects
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 it is wrong
behavior
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apply
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becouse
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because
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cannat
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cannot
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 have
acctive
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active
persons
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people
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 in their community if they
involved
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are involved
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to
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in
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 something
the
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they
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 feel depressed
to
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about
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it
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apply
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Body paragraph 5
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, if you force
somone
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someone
 to be a doctor but
,
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apply
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 he
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wants
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 to
became
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become
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 an Engineer
you
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, you
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 will have a weak doctor
insteade
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instead
 of having a
greatful
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great
 and
inspairing
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inspiring
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Body paragraph 6
in
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In
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summury
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summary
, after discussing both sides of the view.
Conclusion
We should assist and
allows
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allow
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student
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with
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to
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beeing
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be
 supported and empowered to achieve their goals,
dream
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dreams
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 and
passion
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passions
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.

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task achievement
Improve your introduction to clearly state both views and your opinion more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraphs for each point you want to make. This helps the reader follow your ideas better.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple sentences and correct spelling to avoid confusion. This helps readers understand your points.
task achievement
You clearly show that you understand the topic and discuss both views.
task achievement
You make a good argument for letting students follow their interests.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • university
  • students
  • study
  • subjects
  • freedom
  • passion
  • creativity
  • skills
  • interests
  • society
  • unexpected
  • believe
  • focusing
  • useful
  • good
  • jobs
  • future
  • practical
  • needs
  • opportunities
  • fields
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