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Writing Samples
Band 2

in the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statements.

I am writing to express my desire to
attending
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attend
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in
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an
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 English course attending in
abrod
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abroad
. I have been working in
this
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institue
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institute
 for 4 years and I am
incharge
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in charge
 of
IT
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the IT
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 sector.My
dute
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duty
 is solving
issue
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issues
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 that may occur in the
brodcast
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broadcast
 of the movie that
company
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the company
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 present
for
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to
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 their customer. As I
mantioned
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mentioned
 for takle of
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this
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these
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problems
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problems,
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 I have to be
update
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updated
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 and read several articles
in
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apply
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the
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every
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 day via the internet.
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Furthermore
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furthermore
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 I must have
exelent
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excellent
 ability to
reading
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read
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 and
writing
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write
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 in English. If
i
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I
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 can attend
to
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apply
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this
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course
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course,
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 it can
suitable
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be suitable
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 for
my
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me
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 to resolve
rhe
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the
 problem that
face
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I face
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 to it in
the
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apply
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work
day
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apply
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. I can read new material about my job
and
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, and
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 it can help me to be a better employee
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. also
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Also
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also
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also,
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 after
i
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I
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 come
back
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back,
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 I can teach my
coulege
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college
 freely. Thank you for your time and attention. I am
wating
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waiting
 to
hearing
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hear
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 from you yours faithfuly Ali reza

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coherence and cohesion
Your essay has some good ideas, but it would be better with clearer organization. Try to have a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Each paragraph should have one main idea.
task achievement
Make sure to check your spelling and grammar. There are several mistakes that make it hard to understand your points clearly.
task achievement
You could add more specific examples of how improving your English will help you at work. This would make your argument stronger.
task achievement
You clearly stated your desire to attend the English course and explained why it is important for your job.
task achievement
You highlighted your work experience and responsibilities, which adds credibility to your request.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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