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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

In the opinion of some people, internet has narrowed the gap among people in the world by increasing social interaction. To what extent do you agree/disagree with this view?

Nowadays, some people think that social media has
reduce
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the
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community
interaction
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.
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 others believe
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is
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 not correct and social
interaction
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still
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 stable. The following essay will discuss and explore the opposing views surrounding the issue and provide a reasoned opinion.
Firstly
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, I strongly agree
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that
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internet
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the internet
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 in general has increased social
interaction
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and
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 I will
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in
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 detail below. The
internet
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became
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a
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 important part
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 our lifestyle
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 it is useful as well and helping many people to communicate with their friends, family, and working partners.
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, it is assisting the companies
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 employees to work remotely and they can support the operation smoothly.
In other words
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, technology and
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internet
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the internet
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 are
impact
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the
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apply
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humanity directly
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it
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 have to different face
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it
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could
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 be
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on
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good
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 way or the opposite.
In addition
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, we are able to empower
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internet
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 to
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 for us and can
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 in several
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 either to upgrade our
live
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 or improve
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. In conclusion, after analysis of both side views. Personally, I believe that
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internet
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the internet
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 is increasing social
interaction
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 and
support
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 us to live our best life and level up the communication for
individual
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individuals
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 and
narrowed
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narrows
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 the gap among people in the universal.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea. This will help your essay flow better.
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Use specific examples to support your opinions. This can make your argument stronger.
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Check grammar and sentence structure to improve clarity. Simple sentences are better than complex if they are clear.
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Add a brief summary of your main points in the conclusion to reinforce your argument.
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You express a clear opinion about the topic, showing that you have thought about the issue.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction sets up the essay well by mentioning that you will discuss different views.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • cultural exchange
  • social interaction
  • online communities
  • shared interests
  • democratized access
  • cultural barriers
  • empathy
  • connectivity
  • real-time interaction
  • perspectives
  • marginalized voices
  • belonging and unity
  • knowledge sharing
  • cross-border collaboration
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