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Writing Samples
Band 2

Some people prefer to use energy-saving modes of transportation like hybrid cars and bicycles. Others prefer the usual mode of transportation like buses and trains because it is fast and efficient. Which mode of transportation do you prefer and why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Some
people
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 prefer common methods of transportation,
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 as trains and buses, as they are more efficient and quicker;
however
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, energy-saving vehicles
such
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 as hybrid cars and bicycles are used by other
people
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. In my opinion, using environmentally friendly vehicles helps to save fuel, which eventually leads to having a healthy lifestyle for
people
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 and a disease-free nation. Admittedly, energy-efficient resources of travelling are best for
people
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 as they are time and cost saving, as the masses can travel at any time with their private vehicles.
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, in most of the developed nations

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conclusion
Provide a clear conclusion that sums up your main points.
supporting points
Use more examples to support your ideas and arguments.
structure
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and follows a logical order.
task response
You clearly state your opinion on the topic.
coherence
Your introduction is well-structured and gives a sense of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon footprint
  • Cardiovascular health
  • Cost-effective
  • Maintenance costs
  • Flexibility
  • Versatile
  • Public transportation
  • Congestion
  • Infrastructure
  • Independent
  • Safety considerations
  • Designated bike lanes
  • Environmentally friendly
  • Mitigate climate change
  • Pollution
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