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6 July 2025, The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.

6 July 2025, The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.
The line graph presents the total
number
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 of international
students
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 pursuing studies at Sheffield University from 2005 to 2009, especially from Iran, Greece, and Turkey.
Overall
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, Iranian and Turkish
students
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 showed an upward trend,
while
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 Greek
students
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 declined over the period. In terms of Greek
students
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,
although
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 the figure recorded the highest
number
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 in the initial year (at 180
students
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), it experienced a downward trend, as it decreased to around 150 in 2006 before falling more
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 to 65 in 2007.
This
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 figure remained exchanged in 2008 and
then
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 dropped again to around 42 in the final year.
On the other hand
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, the total enrolment of Iranian
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 increased marginally from just under 40 in 2005 to exactly 60 in 2006 and continued to grow gradually in the next two years, reaching more than 80 in 2008.
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,
this
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number
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 rose sharply to 160 in 2009, which was
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the highest
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 in that year.
By comparison
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, in 2005, there were only 20 Turkish
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 studying
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 Sheffield University, making it the smallest
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 among the three.
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, it kept growing and surpassed the total
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 of Iranian
students
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 in 2006
as well as
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 that of Greek
students
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 in 2007 (at around 90) before maintaining a gradual increase in the remaining years, reaching approximately 122 in 2009.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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