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The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides key information about the types of alternative media used by individuals from various
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groups
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 to access the latest news in one country in 2011. The figures are measured in percentages.
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, it is clear from the graph that radio was the most popular source of news among the majority of
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groups
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In addition
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, radio recorded the highest numbers across other categories,
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 microblogging had the lowest usage throughout.
According to
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 what is shown, elderly individuals 65 and above showed a clear preference for using traditional media rather than keeping up with modern trends. In terms of the
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groups
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 of 30-49 and 50-
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patterns
: high figures for radio usage, moderate use of social networks, and minimal engagement with microblogging. Both the 10-17 and 18-29
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groups
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 showed significantly higher use of social networks compared to other
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groups
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. In conclusion, the data highlight clear trends and notable differences across categories back in 2011.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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