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A friend who lives in another country has invited you to come and stay wit him/her on your next holiday. You are too busy to accept the invitation. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, Thank him/her for the invitation *Explain why you cannot come Ask him/her about other times to visit

Hi Rashi, I hope you are enjoying
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Canada. I received your letter yesterday. I am very glad and thankful to you as you invite me to your place
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upcoming
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the upcoming
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 holidays. Unfortunately, I can't come
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on
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 my vacation
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poor
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the poor
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 health of my grandmother. She
is
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has been
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 really sick
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for
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couple
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a couple
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 of weeks. As you know,
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my
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 parents are out of
city
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the city
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due to
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business
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a business
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 trip.
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, I have to stay with her all the time.
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, doctors
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 suggested that she needs proper care and rest. I really apologise for the cancellation of our plan, even
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though i
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i
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I
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 am very sad. I promise,
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we
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 will meet soon and will enjoy
alot
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a lot
. Let me know whenever you
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 free from your work, and we will plan
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. Again, my heartiest apologies to you. Best regards, Suman.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to structure your paragraphs better. Each paragraph should have one clear idea. For example, have one paragraph for thanking, one for explaining, and one for asking about future visits.
task achievement
Make sure to clearly express your feelings about not being able to visit. You can use phrases like 'I feel sad' or 'I miss you' to show your emotions more.
task achievement
You were polite and showed your feelings well in the letter, which is great!
coherence and cohesion
Your ending was friendly and hopeful, making it clear you want to plan for a future visit.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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