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Band 7.5

A colleague gave you a book which you used for your presentation. Write a letter to your colleague. In your letter, you should say: •What the presentation was about, •Why the presentation was important, •How did the book help you? You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear …………….. , You get 20 minutes to complete this task.

Dear Mr. Brown, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my gratitude towards you, as you helped me a lot throughout the
presentation
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. As you know, our boss handed over some topics to us to make a brief
presentation
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 on
them
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last
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 week. Unfortunately, I got a difficult subject named marketing in an area with no advanced technologies.
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,
this
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presentation
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 was crucial for me. As it was my first solo
presentation
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, I had to give my best. Despite it, it not only helped in my personal growth but
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 boosted my knowledge about remote areas. Happily, our boss really liked my
presentation
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 and
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 gave me another essential project. It wasn't possible without the book you gave me. It had all the vital information that was needed to make my video fascinating
among
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 the audience.
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, the book
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 had some articles about marketing strategies, which helped me a lot.I really appreciate your guidance and support. Best regards, Ash

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to keep each paragraph focused on one main idea for better clarity.
task achievement
Expand on how the book helped you, providing specific examples or details.
task achievement
Great use of a friendly and appreciative tone in the letter.
coherence and cohesion
Well-organized structure with clear introduction, body, and closing.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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