There is a trend in the 21 century in which people are turning to alternative healing like Ayurveda and homeopathy over allopathic medicine. Discuss the Advantages and disadvantages of this approach.

It is argued that people now
are prefering
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traditional
medicine
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over modern
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will display the benefits of using
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traditional
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as they are more natural and can be used with modern
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as well,
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drawbacks
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it is not scientifically
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approved
and can make the patient's condition worse. Turning to alternative
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to
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heal
some diseases
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some advantages. One of them is that most of the
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come from natural resources like herbs.
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, there will be no added
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harmful chemicals
in what a person will consume. Another point is
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using
it as a side treatment with the regular doctors' plans.
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, a lot of hospitals in China have
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Chinese
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departments to provide an additional treatment
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the regular
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, there are some disadvantages of depending only on traditional
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. They make the
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condition worse
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, especially
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if patients stop following their
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guidence
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guidance
. Many people are diagnosed with terminal
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illnesses
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like cancer, but rather than going to a
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hospital,
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they prefer to use natural ways to heal their disease.
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their condition will get worse and doctors might not be able to save them. Another disadvantage is that the
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efficacy
of the majority of the used herbs
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not scientifically approved.
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, many studies found that most of the
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treatments used
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treatments
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in traditional
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have extremely negative side effects. In conclusion, alternative
medicine
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can be beneficial since it comes from nature and it can be used to support the efforts of
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modern
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, it can
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complicate
the
patient
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patient's
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disease and the used
treatments
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are not
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proven
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to be effective by science.

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grammar
Make sure to check your spelling and grammar. Words like 'prefer' instead of 'prefering' and 'guidance' instead of 'guidence' should be correct.
coherence
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task achievement
Give more specific examples and details to support your points. For example, mention specific herbs or treatments to help clarify your ideas.
task achievement
You did well to mention both advantages and disadvantages of traditional medicine.
coherence
The overall structure of your essay is clear with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • holistic approach
  • allopathic medicine
  • homeopathy
  • Ayurveda
  • preventive measures
  • side effects
  • pharmaceuticals
  • scientific validation
  • regulation
  • peer-reviewed research
  • health risks
  • alternative therapies
  • conventional medicine
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