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Band 4.5

are traditional book better than e-books. compare reading printed books with reading digital books. which do you prefer and why

Are daily
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 better than
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books
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.
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 will discuss both sides of reading a weekly booklet and an e-album. Some people think that reading a digital
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 is easier , but I disagree with
this
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are
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 my way to read
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book
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. Because
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 love the aroma of
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book
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 and the printed text. It is simple to carry around like
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book
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which
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 really care. From my perspective, reading a traditional
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 is a kind of hands-on activity
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 more flexible who want to feel the
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's pages.
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, my sister is keen on the smell of
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 and the feeling of flipping the pages.
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 it may seem like it is harmful to the environment because of cutting the trees to get the paper.
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, traditional
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 are way more expensive than
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books
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 because they require more supplies. Even though
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 it can be carried around everywhere you go because it doesn't need a battery ,
which
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 only has
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books
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.
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,
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books
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 are eco-friendly because it doesn't need to cut the trees to get hundreds of paper. If it has a battery,
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 you can enjoy reading everywhere. But, it can distract
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attention because it is easier to scroll through your phone. If you get a call from someone whom you really care
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 eventually you may open the social apps directly. And you stop reading and get the information from your head to call it a day.
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, the sight of the eyes gradually gets worse if someone reads at night a lot. Scientists discovered that if you read
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books
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 , something like
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 can be worse for your eyesight. To wrap it up, reading paper
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 is harmful to the trees and more expensive , but if you love the feeling of reading
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,
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 it is win deal. Virtually, if you like to read
e-
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books
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, it'll worsen your eyesight but is slightly friendly for the ecosystem. So it's up to you.

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task response
Make sure to give a clear opinion in the introduction. This will help the reader understand your position better.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use clearer transitions between ideas so the essay flows better. Words like 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally' can help.
task achievement
You provide good personal insights and examples, which make your points relatable and interesting.
task achievement
Your writing shows a good understanding of both sides of the argument, which adds depth to your essay.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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