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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear

Dear Amrit, How are you? I hope you've been well. I read the letter you sent
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 week asking for my opinion regarding the camping holiday you have been planning recently. I believe it is a superb idea to go and relax in nature's lap.
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, I looked for some perfect spots for camping, and shortlisted Brant Conservation Area, as the ambience of
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 place is just awesome.
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 considering advantages, I would like to give you some insight about disadvantages as well. As
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 is your first
time
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, make sure you wear comfortable shoes and full sleeve clothes because there are
lot
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a lot
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 of spiders and mites in
conservation
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the conservation
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 area, and don't
forgot
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 to take mosquito spray.
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, you have to be
vigilent
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vigilant
 all the
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, as
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 is the peak summer
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, and there might be some snakes in the area; but
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this
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 will be
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an
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 excellent experience for you. Unfortunately, I will not be able to join you
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 the camping trip because my mother is coming to visit me during that
time
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, and I really want to spend some quality
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 her as it's been a long
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 since I
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 met her. I can't wait to hear your stories after
trip
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the trip
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. Your friend, Simran

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coherence cohesion
Try to clearly separate the disadvantages and advantages and make sure to support your points with more details.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to follow a clearer structure by introducing each paragraph with a topic sentence, which helps the reader understand what to expect.
task achievement
Consider adding a closing statement that encourages your friend or expresses excitement about their trip to enhance your connection.
suitable writing tone
You presented a friendly tone and good opening and closing sections for your letter which sets a nice mood.
complete response
You provided useful suggestions about camping that your friend can follow, which shows you care about their experience.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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