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In the last decade, there has been a great increase in global air travel. What do you think are the reasons for this and do you think it is a good thing?

In
current
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 century,
people
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 are more likely to travel
with
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by
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aircrafts
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aircraft
,
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.
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 I argue that
this
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 is a great thing in case of
many
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several
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reason
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reasons
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 that
i
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I
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 will mention. In my view, one of the most important reasons that
traveling
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travelling
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with
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by
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airplane
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aeroplane
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 is more popular than
the
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apply
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other
vehicels
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vehicles
 is managing time.
This
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 kind of transportation is the fastest way to arrive
in
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at
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 any
places
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place
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 in
whole
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the whole
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 world in a short time.
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, for busy
people
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 or
stuffs
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staff
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 who
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have
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limit
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 days off can be a great choice, they don`t have to waste a day to arrive
to
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at
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 another city.
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, it is suitable for business trips. All airlines have been distributing
wide
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a wide
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 range of VIP services like
seprate
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separate
 areas for
confrances
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conferences
,
meeting
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meetings
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 or even personal rooms with beds and everything. On
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top of that, aircraft would be a
greatt
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great
 option for disabled,
injury
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injured
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people
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 or
the
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those
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 one
has
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have
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phycical
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physical
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in
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on
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road
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the road
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 for long hours.
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,
the
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eldery
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elderly
people
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has
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have
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 less ability to
waiting
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wait
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,
orsiting
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or sitting
for long hours in cars or trains.
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, road trips can be
exhusting
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exhausting
 for
disable
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disabled
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people
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 and their
family
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families
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and
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, and
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 it`s not
comfortable
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as comfortable
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 as
the
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an
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airplane
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aeroplane
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is
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.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, some of the highways are crowded and have heavy
rafics
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traffic
,
while
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 you are going to be on the way more than with
airport
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an airport
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, you might
stuck
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get stuck
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 in
trafic
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traffic
, the thing that never
happend
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happens
 in air
travels
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travel
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. By
the
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apply
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way of conclusion, I strongly believe
traveling
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travelling
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 with airlines is
wiser
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a wiser
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 choice
that
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than
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 other transportation because it`s faster,
have
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has
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 better
fecilities
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facilities
 and
better
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is better
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 for disabled
people
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. Another thing is, there is no traffic or crowded roads.

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task achievement
Make sure to have a clear introduction that states your main points clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Use paragraphs to clearly separate different ideas. Each paragraph should have one main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Check spelling mistakes and grammar for clearer writing.
task achievement
You gave good examples to support your points, like talking about busy people and elderly travelers.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic growth
  • Disposable income
  • Aviation technology
  • Efficient
  • Proliferation
  • Budget airlines
  • Globalization
  • Tourism
  • Social media
  • Promotional activities
  • Economic development
  • Cultural exchange
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon emissions
  • Climate change
  • Over-tourism
  • Local resources
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