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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
The provided line chart indicates how the price of copper, nickel, and zinc
hd
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had
 been altering monthly in 2014.
Overall
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, the price of nickel significantly decreased from 6% in
january
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January
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 to 1% in
desember
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December
,
while
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 zinc
excperinced
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experienced
 the highest
increased
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increase
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, reaching 2%
amoung
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among
of
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apply
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all. The
precentage
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percentage
 of zinc was the lowest
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% in
january
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January
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.
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, it peaked
of
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at
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 3% in
february
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February
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. It slowly
fall
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fell
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 to 1% in
may
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May
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. It
flactuated wildy
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fluctuated wildly
, and the trend was upward. It reached its
higest
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highest
 point at 2% in
december
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December
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. Nickel had been falling from 6% to _3%. It
sinked
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sank to
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 the lowest level
comper
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compared to
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 two other trends.
Afterward
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, it rose sharply at -1% in
july
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July
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. It remained steady for 3 months.
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, it
jump
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jumped
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 and reached 1% in
november
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November
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.
Coper
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Copper
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 price mostly declined, especially in the first half of the year, peaking in
july
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July
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 at 1%.
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, it remained unchanged
3
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for 3
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months.
Then
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, it
leveled
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levelled
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 up approximately 1.5%.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average
  • monthly
  • change
  • price
  • metals
  • trends
  • increased
  • decreased
  • fluctuating
  • peak
  • stabilized
  • consistent
  • comparison
  • overall
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