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The graph below shows the fertility rate of women in different Gulf Countries from 1990 to 2000. Write a report describing the information in the graph below.

The graph below shows the fertility rate of women in different Gulf Countries from 1990 to 2000. Write a report describing the information in the graph below.
The bar chart provides key information about the percentages of
fertility
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women
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 in
Bahrain
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,
Kuwait
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, Qatar,
Oman
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, Saudi Arabia and the UAE between 1990 and 2000. The units are measured in proportion.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the proportion of
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fertility
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women
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 in
Oman
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 and
KSA
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 had the highest figures,
while
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 the
fertility
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 rates of
women
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 in
Bahrain
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 and
Kuwait
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 had the lowest. In general, there were noticeable differences among the categories.
According to
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 what is shown, in 1990, the percentages of
fertility
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women
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 in
Oman
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 and
KSA
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 recorded the highest proportion at around 7% and 6.5% ,
whereas
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 the
fertility
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 rates of
women
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 in
Bahrain
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 and
Kuwait
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 were significantly lower at 3.5%. Meanwhile, the figures for
Oman
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 and
KSA
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also
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 changed from 7% and 6.5% to 5.5% and 5.5%. Compared to
Bahrain
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 and
Kuwait
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, all cities except
KSA
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 and
Oman
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 experienced the lowest figures

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fertility, women, bahrain, kuwait, oman, ksa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fertility rate
  • trend
  • significant increase
  • significant decrease
  • Gulf countries
  • data
  • analyze
  • compare
  • overall
  • individual country
  • highlight
  • predict
  • period
  • rate changes
  • decline
  • rise
  • fluctuate
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