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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts below illustrate
,
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apply
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 different electrical items owned by households and the time they spent doing house chores
in
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between 1920 and 2019. The electrical appliances are
washing
Correct article usage
a washing
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 machine,
refrigerator
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a refrigerator
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 and
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a vaccum
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vaccum
Correct your spelling
vacuum
 cleaner.
Overall
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,
number
Correct article usage
the number
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 of
hours
Use synonyms
 housewives spent doing chores declined over the years
and
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, and
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 the usage of all three machines
were
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rose over the years. The
vaccum
Correct your spelling
vacuum
 cleaner and refrigerator were used by all the households after 2000.
Firstly
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, in 1920 people had to spend 50
hours
Use synonyms
 per week for cleaning, washing clothes and
preservating
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preserving
 food
and
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, and
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 it
was
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declined
to slightly
Correct word order
slightly to
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 under 40
hours
Use synonyms
 in 1940 with
raising
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the increasing
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numbers
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use
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 of machines
usage
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apply
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.
Moreover
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,
amount
Correct article usage
the amount
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 of time spent
for
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on
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house
Use the right word
housework
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works contineou
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continued
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 to
declined
Wrong verb form
decline
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 after 1940, with 20
hours
Use synonyms
 in 1960, 15
hours
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 in 1980 and 2000 and
lastly
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, only 10
hours
Use synonyms
 in 2019.
Furthermore
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, people started to buy more and more electrical items after 1920. In
1920
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1920,
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 there
was
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were
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 no
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 in any home
but
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, but
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 it had a dramatic rise in
1940
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1940,
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 with more than 50% users
and
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, and
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contineou
Correct your spelling
continued
 to grow over the years and
hit
Verb problem
reaching
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 100% users in 1980.
However
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,
wachine
Correct your spelling
washing
 machine started with 40% in 1920 and ended up
in
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at
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 65% in 2019, meanwhile
vaccum
Correct your spelling
vacuum
 cleaner reached 100% in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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