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Many people try to balance work and other parts of their life. However, this is very difficult to do. What are the problems associated with this? What is the best way to achieve a better balance?

Balancing work and personal life can be challenging
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 various factors. For one thing, there is limited personal
time
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 for employees after long working hours. It is hard for them to
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time
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to
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 their hobbies, families, or even self-care. For another, work-related pressures may spill over into
people
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's daily
lives
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. Workers may still feel stressed out of office hours and do not have the energy to take care of the surroundings of their
lives
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. Most essentially, cultural norms may pressure individuals to
prioritize
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 work over their personal
lives
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.
People
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 may feel guilty of spending
time
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 on achieving their goals rather than working a full-
time
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 job like most
people
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 in
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society. In order to tackle the problem,
people
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 should understand their own needs and the things they want to achieve in their
lives
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. After knowing the priority of the goals,
people
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 can manage their
time
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 by using different tools, like
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a to-do
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 list or planners. If possible, exploring flexible work arrangements is a good way to help
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achieve
 work-life balance. As
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 can help
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 the root of the problem
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, which
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 is long working hours.

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You have mentioned key problems related to work-life balance, such as limited personal time and cultural pressures.
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Your writing shows an understanding of the importance of setting priorities and using tools to manage time.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • stress management
  • personal fulfillment
  • workplace demands
  • tech-savvy
  • disconnect
  • boundaries
  • prioritization
  • time management
  • mental well-being
  • societal pressures
  • flexible working hours
  • job satisfaction
  • self-care
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