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Social media such as Facebook, Twitter, or Instagram has replaced face to face communication in our everyday life. Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages.

Social media(Facebook, Twitter, or Instagram) is commonly used in our everyday life, especially
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 convenience it brings to us. I agree that the development of social media requires
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beneficial
 advantages
such
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 as
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 of
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face to
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face-to-face
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face
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 communication. Living in a blasting information era, people in the world are addicted to
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 their smartphones and
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the
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social media
app
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apps
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. In the past few decades, children tend to play with their friends in the park after school and enjoy the happiness without being interrupted by
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technology.
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, people are used to
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 physical interactions which can be fully expressed to one another. 
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, in recent years, adolescent prefers to have conversations via
facebook
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Facebook
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 or
uses
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facetime
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FaceTime
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 to have interactions. Communicating with messages through social platforms has become a new way to exchange feelings. It has
became
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 more convenient for individuals to share ideas rather than having an arrangement to meet up and talk in person. In conclusion,
although
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 the proportion of
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face to
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face
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 interactions has decreased with the development of
medias
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media
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, we can not deny that it has brought efficiency and convenience to our
life
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lives
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.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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