Today's essay topic: *People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse.*

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all around the world in different modern
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been showing that mothers, fathers, and all the people around them
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the worst impact on youth to use
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will bring
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to it. It is obvious that one cause of using
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in early
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is the environment that
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the lowest quality of life. The
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of that place are more
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by using
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because it is more available than
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as food
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in their local
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. Recommendation to decrease youth abuse is
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government must be aware
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these
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, and Another cause is family, which is the main cause. Parents have the highest impact on their
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, when they use
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in front
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, they will
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that
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immediately
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, some
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parents try to encourage their
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to buy it for them. It would be
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if their
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it to the police. They will be educated by the government and make
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children
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, the number of young people who use
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drugs
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been rising sharply.
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, there are many reasons and effects that can be
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by advocates
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children
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and youth.

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language
Make sure to correct spelling mistakes (e.g., 'drogs' should be 'drugs').
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Try to use full sentences and check grammar. Some sentences are hard to read.
coherence
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task achievement
Add more examples to support your points. This helps to make your arguments stronger.
content
You clearly identify the causes and effects of drug use, which is a strong point in your essay.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • peer pressure
  • glamorize
  • substance abuse
  • preventative measures
  • cognitive function
  • alienation
  • awareness campaigns
  • mental health issues
  • parental supervision
  • social stigma
  • rehabilitation programs
  • early intervention
  • psychoactive substances
  • adolescence
  • decriminalization
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