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The table shows the producton of milk annually in four countiries in 1990,2000 and 2010

The table shows the producton of milk annually in four countiries in 1990,2000 and 2010
The given table compares milk production in several countries between three periods of the year
Overall
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, two trends show that
,
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apply
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 Tanzania and Guatemala rose gradually in numbers,
while
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Australia
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's product declined as the Netherlands as, and
this
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trend
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 experienced some fluctuations In Tanzania's exports accounted for 87000
litres
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 in
1990
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1990,
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 compared to
Australia
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,
its
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where its
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 tendency rose to 84000 in 2010. After 2000, Tanzania's
trend
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 experienced a huge amount of milk production , 1,42,000
litres
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 if compared to Guatemala, which reached 55,000
litres
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 in
this
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 year The figures for
Australia
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's production reached a total of 11,246,000
litres
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 in 1990. After 2000, countries Netherlands and
Australia
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 declined to 11,155,000 and 11,105,000 , respectively.
Australia
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's
trend
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 experienced a decrease to 9,165,000 in 2010,
while
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Netherlands'
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the Netherlands'
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trend
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 reached its peak of 11,466,000 in the final period

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, trend, litres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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