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Band 3

many countries import food material from other countries. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

With the
globalization
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globalisation
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 of the world, every
country
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 is closely connected in different aspects of our life
and
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, and
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food
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 is the most
founitional
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fundamental
 one. Importing
food
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 production from other
countries
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 brings both
possitive
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positive
 and negative effects for one
country
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. On the one hand, it is
benificial
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beneficial
 to
perchease
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purchase
food
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 from other
countries
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,which gives people chances to try various kinds of
food
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 and improves
culture
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communiction
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communication
 by introducing the customs behind the
food
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. Importing
food
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 can promote
the
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apply
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trades
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trade
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 between
countries
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, which helps
countries
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 make
a
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apply
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more friendly
relation
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. It
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also can
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can also
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relive
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relieve
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 the pressure of agriculture. When there is
some thing
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something
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 wrong with the
country
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's
food
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 production, it can solve the problem by importing
food
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 material from other
countries
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 to avoid
hungriness
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hunger
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.
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, it probably
have
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has
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 some negative influences
in
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on
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 the
food
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 development of the
country
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. If people prefer the
food
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 from
other
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another
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country
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, they may not choose their local
food
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and
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this
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 situation may lead to a negative result. Some
food
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 factories may not need too many
prople
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people
, which will increase the unemployment rate in
this
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 area. In conclusion, buying
food
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 material from other
countries
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 has advantages and disadvantages, so our
country
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 should control it
in
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at
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 a suitable level to make it a beneficial thing
to
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for
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 our
country
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.

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language
Make sure to proofread your work to catch spelling mistakes such as 'benificial' instead of 'beneficial'.
content
Try to provide clearer main points with more details and examples.
coherence
Use transition words (like 'firstly', 'in addition', 'however') to improve the flow between ideas.
cohesion
Expand on your conclusion by summarizing the main points clearly.
content
You introduced the topic well and explained both sides of food importing.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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