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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Some people believe studying literature is essential for individual character building, while others think it wastes times.

Literature
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 is a big part of human history and learning. Some
people
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 believe that studying it helps to create
better
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a better
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 personality and strong morals. Others,
however
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,
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say
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 it is not helpful and takes time for nothing. In
this
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 writing, I will talk about both sides and give my opinion. On one hand,
literature
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help
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helps
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 us understand different
people
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 and emotions. When will read
books
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, we go into
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the characters
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characters
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characters'
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life
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lives
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 and feel what they feel.
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, when I read
to
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apply
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“
kill
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To Kill
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 a
mockingbird
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Mockingbird
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”, I understood better about justice and empathy.
Literature
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also
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teach
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teaches
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 us how to think
deep
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deeply
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 and analyse difficult topics. Many
people
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 become more kind and open-minded because of
books
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.
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,
Some
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some
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people
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 believe studying
literature
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 is not practical. They think it’s better to learn skills that bring
job
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a job
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 or money.
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for
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For
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 example, computer science
business
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, business
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 or medicine
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also
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, also
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 some students find
literature
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 boring and hard to understand, especially old
books
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 with difficult language
Because
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. Because
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 of that, they lose interest and feel it
waste
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wastes
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 their time.
in
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In
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 my opinion,
literature
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 is not
waste
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a waste
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. It helped us grow as
people
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 and see
world
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the world
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 in
different
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a different
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 way. Even if it did not give direct job skills, it
make
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made
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 us more human. So I believe it should stay in education.
to conclude
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, even if something
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literature
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in literature
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 is not
useful
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useful,
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 I believe it is important for our minds and hearts.
Books
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 are not just words- they are windows to
human
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the human
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 soul.

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Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion on the topic. This helps the reader understand your main point right away.
coherence and cohesion
Connect your ideas better. Use linking words to show how your points relate to each other.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use varied sentence structures. This makes your writing more interesting to read.
coherence and cohesion
Check your spelling and capitalization. For example, ‘Say’ should be lowercase, and ‘for’ should be capitalized at the start of a new sentence.
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Use specific examples that support your points more clearly. This helps make your arguments stronger.
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You have a clear understanding of both sides of the argument.
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Your example from ‘To Kill a Mockingbird’ is relevant and shows your understanding of the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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