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The pie chart shows the percentage of car ownership by make in three countries in 2015. Summarize the information by select and report the main features, make comparison where relevant.

The pie chart shows the percentage of car ownership by make in three countries in 2015. Summarize the information by select and report the main features, make comparison where relevant.
The chart presents the
amount
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number
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 of individuals
that
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who
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 have
there
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their
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 own
cars
Use synonyms
 includes three different countries in 2015.
Overall
Linking Words
,
in
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from
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 1995 to
2025
Punctuation problem
2025,
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 there is
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a gradually
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gradually
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gradual
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 growth for
people
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they
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who
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 have two or more
cars
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 registered in their names
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; opposite
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opposite
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in
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that
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that,
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 there is
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a clearly
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clearly declined
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clear decline
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between
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from
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 1995 to 2015 for
people
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 who don't
owns
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own
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cars
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. The
amount
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number
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 of
people
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 they have one
care
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car
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 in 1995 , 2005 and
2015
Punctuation problem
2015,
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 over 40%
Linking Words
this
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is
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 the
most highly
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highest
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 percentage of all the others
Punctuation problem
. after
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after
Fix capitalization
After
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 that right way there us the type of those who have two or more
cars
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has
Verb problem
apply
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gradual
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gradually
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 diminished bigen in 2025 in order
to
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from
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 1995 registered by 40
persent
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per cent
 to under 20
present
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per cent
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. If we had looked
to
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at
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 those
have
Correct pronoun usage
who have
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 no
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cars
Punctuation problem
cars,
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 we see there is a
slightly fluctuated
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slight fluctuation
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down 40% and over 20 % between 1995 to
2025
Punctuation problem
2025,
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that
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which
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 gives us a significant point that
the
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apply
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people
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have
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who have
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 one
care
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car
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they
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apply
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represent the largest quantity.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • car ownership
  • make
  • country
  • comparison
  • distribution
  • vehicle preferences
  • automotive market
  • popular brands
  • market share
  • dominant
  • proportion
  • trend
  • variation
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