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The given graph shows the nitrogen oxide emissions produced by 4 vehicles. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.

The given graph shows the nitrogen oxide emissions produced by 4 vehicles. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.
The line graph shows the
nitrogen
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oxide
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emissions
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 produced by four vehicles
including
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diesel
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a diesel
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 car,
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petrol
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a petrol
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 car,
lorries
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a lorry,
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 and
buses
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a bus
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.
Overall
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, buses and lorries release significantly higher levels of
nitrogen
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oxide
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oxides
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 compared to
petrol
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 and diesel
cars
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, with bus
emissions
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 rising steadily as speed increases.
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,
petrol
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cars
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 consistently produce the lowest
emissions
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 across all speed levels.
Nitrogen
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oxide
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emissions
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 start at around 40g/
km
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 at 10
kph
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 and
it
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apply
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drop steadily, reaching a low point
with
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of
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 over 15
g
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/
km
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 at 90
kph
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. After that,
emissions
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 rise again to nearly 35
g
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/
km
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 at 130
kph
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,
while
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emissions
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 of buses begin below 30
g
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/
km
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 at 10
kph
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 and these increase consistently the highest among all, peaking above 40
g
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/
km
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 at 130
kph
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.
Nitrogen
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oxide
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emissions
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 of diesel
cars
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 start at approximately 25
g
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/
km
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 and
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these
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slightly
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 downward trend until 70
kph
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 at about 18
g
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/
km
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,
then
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emissions
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 gradually rise again.
Petrol
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cars
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are
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produce
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 the least
nitrogen
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oxide
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 throughout around 10
g
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/
km
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and
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, and
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 maintain a very stable trend with only minor fluctuations across all speeds.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nitrogen, oxide, emissions, petrol, cars, g, km, kph with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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