There have been major advances in technology over recent decades, and this has led to significant improvements in people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the development of
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, there are many innovations in
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, which can cause improvements in human
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my point of view, I partly agree with
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statement and will outline some reasons to support my opinion. First and foremost,
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can appear in everywhere in our daily
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, including education, entertainment and management government tasks in the digital
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as E-government, E- education, it can help
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attract with the surround world by some tools as social media, or website communication,
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,
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can improve their cultural and deep knowledge.
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, it
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makes our
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more convenient with the development of AI to reduce the work effort, through improving the standard of living.
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, with the development of online shopping,
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as TikTok Shop, Shopee, and Amazon, it can help
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more conveniently without spending a lot of time and effort.
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,
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can bring more functions to
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's
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, it
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has some negative effects,
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the fact that hackers can use the gap on the internet to theft users’ personal information to commit illegal activities in the name of the owner, and scammers can use the trust or lack of knowledge to fraud, appropriation of property.
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, in recent years, Vietnam has had some scam cases on the internet involving foreign
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residing in Cambodia.
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, the role of
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in developing
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's daily
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can not be denied. In conclusion,
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has some drawbacks, if we can reduce them, the benefits can outweigh
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Your introduction provided a clear opinion, but try to make it more direct and clear. State your opinion in a straightforward way.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should have a clear main idea. Ensure that each point connects logically to support your opinion more clearly.
coherence cohesion
Use paragraphs to separate different ideas clearly. This helps readers follow your argument.
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Try to explain your examples a bit more to show how they connect to your main points.
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You provided examples of technology's impact on daily life.
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Your essay showed a balanced view by mentioning both pros and cons of technology.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • cutting-edge
  • innovations
  • breakthroughs
  • automation
  • AI (Artificial Intelligence)
  • mobile technologies
  • diagnostic tools
  • renewable energy
  • efficiency
  • economic growth
  • knowledge sharing
  • global scale
  • cleaner alternatives
  • job displacement
  • update skills
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