Some people believe that governments should make laws about people’s nutrition and food choice while others argue that it is their choice. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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some
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think that governments should mae
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about
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’s nutrition and
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choice
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, others argue that it is their
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.
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, in my opinion i think any
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also
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have two sides , negative and position . On the one hand , the
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should promulgate some
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about the nutrition and
people
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’s
choice
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the
food
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, because when having good
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diet
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for citixen , the socie maybe have good
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,
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sociaety which is a factor to form a sustainable economy . Therefor , the
government
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promulagate some
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will ensure
people
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has good
health
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diet
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such
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as : Strengthen regular and comprehensive
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quality inspection to ensure
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safety , tax on fast
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, …
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: the
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of Japan
also
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promulgate
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about allow the programs of the nutrition in the school ,
due to
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help children have good
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diet
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when they were young and it can get the effective for improve
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of socie in the long run .
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, any individuals
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have the right to make decisions about their healthy
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, beacuse they have increase freedom, meet
people
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's needs
choice
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on the
food
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in their meals .
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: nowaday in the socie have many popular in
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like milktee , spricy noodle , …
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it not good for healthy , the young
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is very like
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taste and entertainment . If the
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ban , some
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will think they deprivation enjoy thier happiness .
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, other
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have rights changes many meals to response their demand .
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rights is recognized in all world , so many
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can and have
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to decide their meal . In short ,
people
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’s
health
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is very important , so we should
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the
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good for ourself , but not develop in the decide of
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choice
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or
laws
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about
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’nutrition . Anychoice
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have two sides , therefor we should
choice
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what is better for us .

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grammar
Make sure to write clear and complete sentences. Try to avoid grammar mistakes. For example, 'made' instead of 'mae' and 'because' instead of 'beacuse'.
structure
Organize your points in a clearer way. Use clear paragraphs for each idea: one for government laws and another for individual choice.
examples
Provide specific examples in a clearer way. When you mention Japan, explain a bit more about their laws. This makes your argument stronger.
argument understanding
You provided both sides of the argument, showing you understand the topic well.
opinion clarity
You have presented your opinion clearly, which is important in these types of essays.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • governments
  • laws
  • nutrition
  • food choice
  • public health
  • diseases
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • problems
  • encourage
  • young people
  • learn
  • schools
  • healthy eating
  • future
  • personal choice
  • interference
  • education
  • teaching
  • options
  • better choices
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