Some people think that development in technology causes environmental problems. Other people believe that technology can solve environmental problems. Discuss both sides of the argument and then give your opinion

In the modern world , environmental
issues
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related to modern
technology
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have become a major concern for many countries. Some assume that going back to the old traditions can be a better solution for alleviating the environmental problems.
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, others think that utilising the help of
technology
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can solve these crises.
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essay will discuss both views . I ,
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, stand with the latter view. On the one hand, there are several reasons why some
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individuals'
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think that leading a simple life can mitigate environmental deterioration.
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, in the modern era , the
issues
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related to nature are surging
due to
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pollution from different sources
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increasing
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the increasing
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use of fossil fuels or
clearing the
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forest
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areas. To elaborate, in the
past
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we can see that
issues
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like those were limited because most people around the world had unluxurious lives.
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, today, most
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individuals
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are using private vehicles like cars and two-wheelers for easy commuting. But, the increasing consumption of natural resources in vehicles has been raising the level of carbon dioxide in
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, and eventually , owing to environmental
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like global warming and so on.
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, if
individuals
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go back to old cultures, using bicycles for transportation can help
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protect nature from destruction.
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, it can
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assist
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people to improve their health
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by cycling.
On the other hand
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,
technology
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can be an important asset for reducing environmental destruction . First of all, researchers can develop so many schemes that are quite
eco
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eco-friendly
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friendly
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such
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as natural gas and electricity as a form of fuel for operating vehicles
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so that
individuals
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can commute comfortably without causing environmental problems.
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, we can see that most environmentally friendly companies today are
also
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developing windmills and solar panels for producing electricity for household purposes .
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, it can curb environmental problems like global warming or pollution from different sources.
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, in most
houses
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there are now biogas plants for storing waste materials , so that they can convert those waste products to different forms like gas for cooking or use as a
fertilizer
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for agricultural
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purposes
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.
To conclude
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, it is obvious that modern
technology
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has caused so much environmental deterioration nowadays.
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, l believe that rather than going back to a simpler life
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we can
utilize
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utilise
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technology
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for protecting nature.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction, making it more obvious which side you support.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer linking words to connect your ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
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Add more specific examples to support your points, especially in both views, to strengthen your arguments.
task achievement
The essay presents both sides of the argument clearly, which is a good way to show understanding of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
The writing has a logical flow, making it easier to follow the argument throughout the essay.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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