Today, more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult such as the sahara What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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century, there was
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number of people who
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coming to visit
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dangerous places. And
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thing has two aspects, the first one is it's a good thing to let people discover the ability of humans and how their ancestors have been living, but some people doesn't have the chance to do that, and that because of the lack of safety in those areas, so i believe that it's a good thing to have the curiosity and the passion of

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Provide a clearer introduction that states the main points of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Add a conclusion that summarizes your ideas.
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Use more specific examples to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Work on linking your ideas together more smoothly.
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You have a good start with your ideas about curiosity and exploration.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unique natural beauty
  • sense of achievement
  • personal growth
  • resilience
  • survival skills
  • local cultures
  • extreme temperatures
  • limited access
  • physical exhaustion
  • high costs
  • specialized gear
  • guided tours
  • insurance premiums
  • environmental impact
  • fragile ecosystems
  • pollution
  • habitat disruption
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