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Band 3.5

The growing population in many of the world's major cities has become a significant concern. This essay will examine possible solutions to reduce the impact of this issue

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overpopulation
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Overpopulation
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 in major urban
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centers
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. The foremost cause is the rural to urban  migration in search of better job opportunities,access to better services
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 as health,education and improved quality of life.
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 economic and commercial activities are concentrated in big cities, which attracts more
population
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Therefore
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 more and more people move to major
areas
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and
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led
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over
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overpopulation
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population
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 in these settings.               To mitigate
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 issue, there are several effective solutions.
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, governments should focus on
development
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the development
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 of rural and small
areas
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.By creating job opportunities and improving services in rural
areas
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 and small towns
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consequently
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 reduces the migration to big cities.
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,
by
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 using new technologies in the management of cities
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such
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, such
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 as
intelligence
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an intelligence
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 system for traffic control and resource
management
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management,
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 can help reduce the problems caused by
overpopulation
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.
additionaly
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 government can advertise and increase
the
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apply
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public awareness about the consequences of
population
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 growth and the importance of living in a decentralised
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areas
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area
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. By implementing these solutions, it is possible to help reduce the problems caused by
population
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 growth in urban
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centers
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overpopulation
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 in urban
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centers
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 is a complex issue and a multicausal situation
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by
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 several reasons
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economy
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 and social
.
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factors.
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Tackling
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 problem requires a comprehensive strategy.By implementing solutions that were mentioned above and encouraging balanced regional growth, major urban
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centers
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 can diminish the pressure of
overpopulation
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Also
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 addressing
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 challenge not only benefits urban
areas
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 but
also
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 can help to broader economic stability and environmental sustainability.

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You identified important causes and solutions for overpopulation in urban areas.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the key points of your essay.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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