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The line graph below shows internet users as percentage of population in three different countries.

The line graph below shows internet users as percentage of population in three different countries.
The line chart below indicates internet
users
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 as
proportion
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a proportion
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 of citizens in
USA
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the USA
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, Mexico and
Canada
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.
Overall
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, the number of online
users
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 in
Canada
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 is the highest, and in Mexico, the online population is the lowest. To be more clear, people who used the internet
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in
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1999 in
Canada
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 increased significantly by 10% to 30% in two years, and it continued to increase dramatically between the middle of 2001 to 2009 by 100%.
Secondly
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, the online population in
USA
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the USA
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 were higher than the online population in
Canada
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 , but it ranked the second highest
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users
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apply
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in 2009 by 80%, the internet
users
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had
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having
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 an upward trend between 1999 to 2009 by nearly 5% per cent, to two-fifths of digital
users
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words users, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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